EU individual paragraph: Travelling in the EU!

It is undeniable that the EU facilitates our international lives by far thanks to the open boarders. First of all, you do not need your passport with you all the time anymore. When crossing boarders nobody controls you, you can simply enter the new country without any inconvenience. A small drawback about this is, however, that you do not get those cool stamps anymore. Secondly, the import of goods became really simple and cheap as the EU repealed the laws concerning duty. Many people make use of this by going shopping in the neighbouring country if they live close to the boarder, because often it is cheaper than in their home country. On top of that, EU-citizens now have the possibility to work and live in any of the EU-countries without much difficulty. They do not need to get a visa, for example, or a working permit. To sum it up, we really do benefit from our EU-membership, especially in terms of travelling and working abroad.

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FEEDBACK:
by far -> much
with you all the time anymore -> when you are travelling anymore
the new country -> another EU-member state
get those cool stamps -> can not add the individual stamps of the countries to your passport anymore
possibility -> opportunity

It is undeniable that the EU facilitates our international lives much thanks to the open boarders. First of all, you do not need your passport when you are travelling anymore. When crossing boarders nobody controls you, you can simply enter another EU-member state without any inconvenience. A small drawback about this is, however, that you can not add the individual stamps of the countries you visited to your passport anymore. Secondly, the import of goods became really simple and cheap as the EU repealed the laws concerning duty. Many people make use of this by shopping in the neighbouring country if they live close to the boarder, because often it is cheaper than in their home country. On top of that, EU-citizens now have the opportunity to work and live in any of the EU-countries without much difficulty. They do not need to get a visa, for example, or a working permit. To sum it up, we really do benefit from our EU-membership, especially in terms of travelling and working abroad.

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FEEDBACK II:

try to avoid using "you" all the time
EU-member state/citizen/membership... -> no hyphen
passport synonym -> could not really find one
try to use more high-register words

FINAL PARAGRAPH:

It is undeniable that the European Union facilitates the international lives of the EU citizens much thanks to the open boarders. First of all, the formerly indespensable passports are no longer required for travelling in most European countries. The entry into another EU member state usually proceeds without the inconvenience of having your passport or luggage controlled. A small drawback about this is, however, that you can not enclose the individual stamps of the countries you visited to your passport anymore. Secondly, the import of goods, which may be cheaper in a neighbouring country, became really simple and inexpensive as the EU repealed the individual laws concerning duty. Many people make use of this by shopping abroad if they live close to the boarder. On top of that, EU citizens now have the opportunity to work and live in any of the EU countries without much difficulty. A visa, for example, or a working permit is not necessary any more. To sum it up, the inhibitants of the European countries really profit from the European Union, especially in terms of travelling and working abroad.

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FINAL, FINAL VERSION:

It is undeniable that the European Union facilitates our international lives much thanks to the open borders. First of all, passports used to be indispensable, but nowadays they are no longer required for travelling throughout the European continent. The inconvenience of having your passport or luggage inspected is no longer existent when travelling in the EU. A minor drawback of this is, however, that  you can no longer add the individual stamps of the countries you visited to your passport anymore. Secondly, goods which might be cheaper in a neighbouring country can be imported easily nowadays as the national laws concerning duty became invalid when the countries joined the EU. Many people take advantage of this by buying products in other member states if they live close to the border. On top of that, EU citizens now have the opportunity to work and live in any of the EU countries without much difficulty. A visa, for example, or a work permit is not necessary anymore. To sum up, the inhabitants of the European countries undoubtedly profit from the European Union, especially in terms of travelling and working. 

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