Showing posts with label Melissa. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Melissa. Show all posts

26/05/2014

How Instant Photographs Work!

In 1947, the first instant camera was built. What was so special about it was the fact that the film developed itself in only a few minutes. This was a major achievement considering that it used to be fairly complicated and time consuming to develop film. Even though it seems to be magic that makes the pictures appear, it actually is a fairly simple process.
There are not too many differences between a regular camera film and an instant camera film, thus, I will commence with explaining photography in general.
Usually, film consists of a plastic base coated with a silver compound. When light hits the film it causes a chemical reaction that forms silver atoms. The pattern created by the silver compound that has reacted with very much, very little or no light at all shows the image taken. Colour film is very similar, the only difference is that it has three layers, one sensitive to blue light, one sensitive to green light and one sensitive to red light. When the film is exposed to light, each layer reacts with its specific colour. Again, the pattern created by the reaction shows the picture taken.
While the chemicals needed to develop normal film have to be added one by one, the instant camera has all the required chemicals in the film itself.
Underneath each colour layer, there is a developer layer containing the dye chemicals for the specific colour. These light sensitive and developer layers lie in between a black base layer and the image layer, the timing layer and the acid layer. The different layers are components of a chain reaction waiting to be set in motion. The component triggering the chain reaction is called reagent layer and is a mixture of opacifiers that block light, alkali that neutralizes acid, white pigment and some more elements. It is located in between the image layer and the light sensitive layer. When a picture is taken, the film is exposed to light for a short period of time and then pressed through a pair of rollers that releases the reagent layer through pressure. The reagent chemicals change the particles exposed to light into metallic silver and dissolve the dye that make the colours of the photo appear. At the same time the reagent chemicals also move upward and activate the layers on top. Once all processes are completed, the light blocking chemical clears up and the picture will slowly appear.

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http://science.howstuffworks.com/innovation/everyday-innovations/instant-film.htm

10/05/2014

Rating Instructions: How to make a Camera Lucida!



At first, the instructions for making a camera lucida looked quite promising and appealing thanks to the drawings, the font and the design in general. After taking a closer look, however, we realized that they are actually quite confusing and not very helpful.
What we first noticed was the missing material and tool list. It was only after carefully reading the instructions that we were able to make our own list. This fact alone takes out the fun of building the camera lucida with theses instructions.
In addition, chronological step-by-step instructions would be a lot easier to understand than writing everything in one paragraph as it is done on the sheet. It is far easier to follow a chronological list than a full text, especially because you want to refer back to the instructions from time to time. Moreover, the instructions are not very detailed, we were fairly confused from time to time.
What we recognized as well was that the drawings do not match the instructions Neither did we know where to start, nor could we make any sense whatsoever of the first drawing.
The firstly believed nice handwriting turned out to be hard to read: We could not decipher whether the figures given were in millimeters, centimeters or even meters.
What confused us the most was the mentioning of David Hockney, what has he to do with all this? Even if he is important in relation to the camera lucida, his name should not be in the instructions.
When analysing the instructions we realized that if we were to build a camera lucida by only using these instructions, we would give up completely frustrated and discouraged. Unless we try to find better instructions on line there will be no camera lucida for us.

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How to make your own Camera Obscura!

What you need:
  • a large piece of card (70x90cm) 
  • a marker pen 
  • a magnifying glass lens 
  • a biro 
  • a craft knife 
  • duct tape 
  • a long ruler 
  •  tracing paper 
How to do it step by step:
  1. For your two cardboard tubes, measure and mark a piece of 60x40cm (Piece 1) and next to it one of 58x20cm (Piece 2). WARNING: Place the pieces carefully on your cardboard, you need to cut out three pieces in total: 60x40cm, 58x20cm and 15x15cm. If you don’t place them carefully you won’t have enough space for all of them. 
  2. Cut the two pieces out with your knife. HINT: In order to make your cuts straight, use the ruler to steady your hand. 
  3. Measure four times the length of 15cm on the long side of Piece 1. 
  4. Measure four times the length of 14,5cm on the long side of Piece 2. 
  5.  Now use the biro to score the card of both pieces. Your Piece 1 should now show four sections of 15x40cm, your Piece 2 should show four sections of 14x20cm.
  6. Once folded, use your duct tape to hold Piece 1 and Piece 2 together incividually. 
  7. Now you need to cut a piece the size of the end of the outer tube, 15x15cm (Piece 3). 
  8. With your marker, make two lines (from corner to corner) which cross in the middle to show you the center of your piece. 
  9. Now place the lens in the middle of this cross and mark its outer lines. 
  10. Remove the lens and mark and cut a small square in the middle of the circle. The size of this square depends on the size of your lens, if your lens has a diameter of 7cm, your square should have a side length of 5-6cm. 
  11. When the square hole is cut out, place the lens in the middle of Piece 3 again and stick it on the card with duct tape. Make sure the duct tape does not cover the entire lens, you need to be able to look through the square you cut out. 
  12. Place Piece 3 on the end of Piece 1 and fix it with duct tape. 
  13. Cut out a piece of tracing paper the size of 16x16cm and tape it on the end of your Piece 2. 
  14. Now slide Piece 2 into Piece 1 so that both covered ends are on the same side. 
  15. Your Camera Obscura is ready for use: go outside and try it out. HINT: You can focus by sliding Piece 1 to and fro. Your image will be upside down, this is a natural effect caused by the lens. 
Special Idea: It will be even more fun to use your Camera Obscura when you paint it and make it more colorful.


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Source: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y0wenfVfHuo

07/05/2014

Compare two Polaroid advertisements

When looking at advertisements 1 and 2, the differences are quite substantial, especially considering they were both advertising for the same product and are both composed of a picture of a Polaroid camera and a text underneath it. Whilst comparing the two pictures we noticed that the first advertisement is from 1956 and the second advertisement is from the 21st century. One thing that struck us immediately when comparing and contrasting the two advertisements is the main focus. While the modern one focuses on the Polaroid camera itself and shows nothing but the product, the older one chooses to feature on a gentleman on a lively street who is looking at a Polaroid camera in a shop window. In addition to this, the texts are very different as well. From analyzing advertisement 2 it is clear to see an explicit reference to the NSA scandal in 2013, the issue of privacy and how this official government organization was spying on basically the entire world. It appeals to everybody’s wish to maintain their human right to keep their private life private by saying that this fantastic Polaroid camera leaves your photos to you and nobody but you, unless you want to share them. However, advertisement 2 does not really tell you to buy the camera. It only implies that it might be favorable if you bought it. The older advertisement, on the other hand, describes the actual process of purchasing the magnificent new camera. It actually tells you to purchase the product by saying “go ahead...get it!”. These substantial differences in message can be explained by the fact that the 1950s were a period of wealth and economic growth. People had money and were eager to spend it. In conclusion we can say that these two Polaroid advertisements are very distinct indeed, even though it does not seem that way at the first glance.

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12/04/2014

Describing Paragraph: Boy With Toy Hand Grenade!

The old black-and-white photo shows an approximately 10 year old boy in a city park holding a toy hand grenade. It looks like a sunny and delightful day. Even though some people are strolling around in the blurry background, the main focus is definitely on the young boy. He is standing on the pavement all by himself, under the shade of the big a tree right behind him. The boy is dressed in a rather casual way, wearing a checked shirt, dark overalls and socks which are far too big. The strap of his overalls hang awkwardly off his right shoulder and create an untidy image. His incredibly skinny arms and legs make him appear undernourished, and since his clothes are oversized this impression is intensified. His actually rather likeable and not unfriendly face is framed by short fair hair. On this photo, however, the boy’s face is contorted in a weird way. His eyes, which looked directly into the camera, are opened wide, his lips are distorted and his teeth are clenched together. The impression that this boy is desperate, tense, even slightly maniac is supported by him making this bizarre face. Additionally, his left hand is strained in a claw-like gesture and his right hand clenches the toy grenade tightly. He seems to be irritated or unsettled by something and does not look relaxed at all. The entire picture creates a rather dark atmosphere and evokes a somehow disturbing ambiguity because of several reasons. One upsetting aspect is that a boy, who should be glad enough to be able to play in a park on a wonderful, sunny day, appears to be so utterly unhappy. In addition to this, his playing with a hand grenade is somehow frightening and troubling.


03/04/2014

Little History of Photography

Peer Feedback:

In general my classmates said that my narrative was pretty good. They mentioned, however, that it is weird that the initiating event is only revealed at the end of my story. While criticizing some spelling and punctuation mistakes or word repetitions, they still concluded that they liked my story.
I know that Inge said I had to look at the punctuation in the direct speech again, so I looked the rules up in the Oxford Dictionary and they confirmed that I actually did it the right way. I don’t know what’s the problem and therefore didn’t change anything.

Final Version:
“My dear little Brownie, when you’re ready you will be one of the most important cameras ever built,” the inventor told the box on his table one bright morning while putting the last little pieces into place. Everything had to be finished by eleven o’clock, when the presentation was going to take place.
“You know, it all started almost 80 years ago, in the early 1820s, when two Frenchmen called Niepce and Daguerre took the first photograph with their Camera Obscura. People back then thought capturing an image was some kind of magic and even thought it was blasphemy to take photographs of humans - it was ridiculous,” the old man laughed.
“Another important man was a physicist, Arago, who held a famous speech in front of the Chamber of Deputies on behalf of photography. Of course, these early technologies couldn’t compete with ours. It took ages to take a photo because of the long exposure time, and they were overly expensive. This, however, was the reason why they were so precious…well, also because each of them was unique, and they were passed on from family member to family member. You will change this, my friend. You will change photography from a luxury to something available for everyone.”
One of the inventor’s colleagues entered the small room, “The presentation starts in half an hour. Will you be ready by then?”
“Of course. Thank you, John.”
When the young man closed the door behind himself, the inventor continued, “We have to fast forward a little, my dear, otherwise you won’t be ready for your big moment. So, where was I? Ah right, it was in the 1860s that photography was becoming more popular. The first professional photography studios were established and families started to have their photographs taken. In these pictures requisites and props were used because people needed something to lean on - the exposure time was still pretty long. Eventually, after a decade or so, photography became even more popular and was seen as some kind of art and even became equal to painting. Surrealist photography started with Atget who no longer focused solely on people but also buildings, squares, or only little parts of something bigger. But you know what? Only rich people and artists had access to cameras. You will change this. You will be the first commercial camera. Now let’s go and impress my boss.” With these words the old inventor took the first Brownie ever built and left the small room with the aim to present it to the world.

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13/12/2013

Text Project Part 4

Joining the EU would be disadvantageous for Switzerland in many ways.
by Birgit Spalt, Bianca StadlerChristine Hartinger


FINAL VERSION:

Experts from various fields argue that joining the EU would be disadvantageous for Switzerland in many ways. This issue has been discussed frequently within the country and throughout Europe. Considering all the problems the European Union has to face at the moment, it seems obvious that an economy as strong as Switzerland’s would only suffer from a membership. Switzerland would have to share its capital, it would have to support the weak economies in Europe financially and it would have less capital for its own needs. Thus most specialists agree that Switzerland would lose a considerable proportion of its wealth and its international status as a safe haven for investors should it ever join the EU. In addition to this, Switzerland would lose its system of direct democracy. Of course the EU would be pleased if Switzerland became a member as the Union would benefit from the country’s membership in many ways. The Swiss are aware of the many different ways in which Switzerland would suffer from this membership and therefore have repeatedly voted against joining the EU.

Despite the fact that Switzerland is such a small country surrounded by countries much richer in resources such as Italy, France and Germany, it is the wealthiest state in the world. According to the findings of a new study by Credit Suisse, the average per capita income amounts to $513,000. This “Swiss miracle” has mostly historical and political origins. Switzerland’s much-praised neutrality spared its citizens the suffering and costs of World War I and World War II. Instead of feeling threatened by its larger neighboring countries, Switzerland has always known how to take advantage of their economic powers. While Germany is its most important trading partner, the Swiss also maintain successful trade relations with the EU. Among their economic achievements are the Free Trade Agreement of 1972 and two Bilateral Agreements, one in 1999 and the other in 2004. One reason for Switzerland’s staggering wealth also lies in the number of highly qualified immigrants drawn to the country’s stable economy ever since the Reformation.

By virtue of the positive relations between Switzerland and the EU, the former already benefits from the latter without being a member. An example of these benefits is the free movement of people, goods, services and capital due to the Schengen treaty. Despite all these treaties, Switzerland is able to guard its sovereignty and liberty, which it would lose if it joined the EU. The act of becoming an EU member is almost impossible to revoke, whereas contracts and treaties can be terminated more easily. One major argument against a membership is that, as a member state, Switzerland would have to implement the laws, regulations and decisions made in Brussels. This would eventually lead to the end of the Swiss’ system of direct democracy that currently ensures that citizens are involved in the decision-making process. Politicians cannot make any major decision without citizens’ approval via referendum. This is a crucial factor which establishes and secures solidarity within the various cultures, religions and languages existing in Switzerland. If the Swiss were deprived of this direct democracy, it would only be a matter of time before frustration would be expressed. This system, combined with financial federalism, also has an impact on the country’s economy, since the decisions concerning taxes and public expenditure are under the citizens’ control. Therefore, membership would lead to a weaker economy. Another issue that would harm the wealth of the country is that it would have to help to rescue countries facing an economic crisis, such as Greece and Italy. As long as Switzerland can benefit from the EU without participating in the Union, there is no need for the country to seek membership.

It is clear, considering all these arguments, that joining the EU would have mostly negative effects on Switzerland. The country itself would lose its independence and its high esteem on an international basis, while its citizens would lose their rights in the decision-making process. This would lead to their wishes being ignored by the government just as in many other countries. To aggravate the situation, a considerable amount of Swiss capital would be allocated to bankrupt countries such as Greece, Italy or Spain. This money could no longer be used to meet Switzerland’s own needs and would be lacking in the social system. Clearly, it is more profitable for the economy, as well as for the citizens, if Switzerland remains an independent trading partner of the EU instead of becoming a member state.


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Second Version:

Experts from various fields argue that joining the EU would be disadvantageous for Switzerland in many ways. This issue has continually been discussed within the country and all over Europe. Considering all the problems the European Union has to face at the moment it seems obvious that an economy as strong as Switzerland’s would only suffer from a membership. Switzerland would have to share its capital, it would have to support all the weak economies in Europe financially and it would have less capital for its own needs. Thus most specialists agree that Switzerland would lose its wealth and its international status as a safe haven for investors should it ever join the EU. In addition to this, Switzerland would lose its system of direct democracy. Of course the EU itself would appreciate it if Switzerland became a member as the Union would benefit from the country’s participation in many ways. The Swiss are well aware of the many different ways in which Switzerland would detract from this membership and therefore repeatedly voted against joining the EU.

Despite the fact that Switzerland is such a small country surrounded by countries much richer in resources such as Italy, France and Germany, Switzerland is the wealthiest state in the world. According to the findings of a new study by Credit Suisse, the average per capita income amounts to $513,000. The “Swiss miracle” has mostly historical and political reasons. Switzerland’s much-praised neutrality has spared its citizens the suffering from World War I and World War II. Therefore, they were also exempt from reconstruction costs and huge reparation payments. Instead of feeling threatened by its larger neighboring countries, Switzerland has always known how to take advantage of their economic powers. Although Germany is its most important trading partner, the Swiss also maintain successful trade relations with the EU. They are able to count the Free Trade Agreement of 1972 and two Bilateral Agreements, one in 1999 and the other in 2004, to their economic achievements. Another reason for Switzerland’s staggering wealth lies in the number of highly qualified immigrants feeling drawn to the country’s stable economy ever since the Reformation.

By virtue of the numerous treaties with the EU and the advantages deriving from these agreements, Switzerland is not in need of becoming a member state of the European Union. An example of these benefits is the free movement of people, goods, services and capital due to the Schengen treaty. Additionally, despite all these treaties, the Alpine country is able to guard its sovereignty and liberty which it would lose in case of an EU membership. It is evident that the act of becoming an EU member is almost impossible to revoke, whereas contracts and treaties can be terminated more easily. One major argument against a membership is that, as a member state, Switzerland would have to implement the laws, regulations and decisions made in Brussels. This would eventually lead to the end of the Swiss’ system of direct democracy that currently ensures involving the citizens in the decision-making process. The politicians can not make any major decision without the citizens’ approval via referendum. This is a crucial factor which establishes and secures solidarity within the various cultures, religions and languages existing in Switzerland. If the Swiss were deprived of this direct democracy due to an EU membership, it would only be a matter of time before frustration and anger would occur. Further, this system combined with the financial federalism also has an impact on the country’s economy. Since the Swiss voted in favor of high taxes, an internal tax competition is generated that keeps all taxes under the citizens’ control and limits public expenditure. Therefore, a membership would lead to a weaker economy. Another issue that would harm the wealth of the country is that it would have to participate in rescuing countries that face an economic crisis such as Greece and Italy. As long as the Switzerland can benefit from the EU without participating in the Union, there is no need for the Alpine country to seek membership.

It is clear, considering all these arguments, that joining the EU would have merely negative effects on the Alpine country. The country itself would lose its independency and its high esteem on an international basis, while its citizens would be deprived of their competences in the decision-making process. This would lead to their wishes being ignored by the government just as in many other countries. To aggravate things, a considerable amount of Swiss capital would be allocated to bankrupt countries such as Greece, Italy or Spain. This money could no longer be used to meet Switzerland’s own needs and would be missing in the social system. Clearly, it is more profitable for the economy, just as for the citizens, if Switzerland remains an independent trading partner of the EU instead of becoming a member state.

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First Version:

The issue of whether or not Switzerland should join the EU has been discussed all over Europe for a very long time. This essay will discuss why joining the EU would be disadvantageous for Switzerland. Considering all the problems the European Union has to face at the moment it seems obvious that an economy as strong as Switzerland would only suffer from a membership. Switzerland would have to share its wealth, it would have to support all the weak economies in Europe financially and it would have less for its own needs. Thus most specialists agree that Switzerland would lose its wealth and its global status should it ever join the EU. In addition to this, Switzerland would also lose its system of direct democracy. Of course the EU itself would be delighted if Switzerland became a member as it would benefit from Switzerland’s participation in many ways. This paper will present the many different ways in which Switzerland would detract from this membership.

Despite the fact that Switzerland is such a small country surrounded by countries much richer in resources such as Italy, France and Germany, Switzerland is once again the wealthiest state in the world. According to the findings of a new study by Credit Suisse, the average per capita income amounts to $513,000. The “Swiss miracle” has mostly historical and political reasons. Switzerland’s much-praised neutrality has spared its citizens the suffering of World War I and World War II. Therefore, they were also exempt from reconstruction costs and huge reparation payments, in the way for example Austria had to. Instead of feeling threatened by its big neighbor countries, Switzerland has always known how to take advantage of their economic powers. While Germany for instance is not only its most important trading partner, the Swiss also maintain successful trade relations with the EU, being able to cite the Free Trade Agreement of 1972 and two Bilateral Agreements, one in 1999 and the other in 2004, to their economic achievements. Another reason for Switzerland’s staggering wealth lies in the number of highly qualified immigrants feeling drawn to the country’s stable economy ever since the Reformation.

Although the economic crisis also affected Switzerland, the country suffered less than most of the EU countries. The Swiss are not in need of becoming an EU member state since there are many advantages deriving from the numerous treaties and contracts between Switzerland and the EU such as the free movement of people, goods, services and capital. Additionally, despite all these treaties, the Alpine country is able to guard its sovereignty and liberty which it would lose in case of an EU membership. It is evident that the act of becoming an EU member is hard to revoke, whereas contracts and treaties can be more easily terminated. One major argument against a membership is that it would lead to a weaker economy, as Switzerland would have to participate in rescuing countries that face an economic crisis such as Greece and Italy. As a member state it would also have to implement the regulations and decisions of the EU as well as accept most of the decisions made in Brussels. It is evident that this would eventually lead to the end of the Swiss’ system of direct democracy. This system currently ensures democracy by involving the Swiss in the decision making concerning laws, constitutional proposals and international treaties. The Alpine country’s politicians have also always valued the public opinion, something the Swiss really appreciate. They are even in favor of high taxes: Direct democracy and financial federalism lead to internal tax competition – which, in turn, keeps all taxes under the citizens’ control and consequently limits public expenditure.Almost no major decision can be made by any politician without the citizens deciding via referendum. This is one essential factor that is needed to establish solidarity within the different cultures, religions and languages existing in Switzerland. If the Swiss were deprived of this direct democracy due to an EU membership, it would only be a matter of time before frustration and anger within the citizens would occur.

It is clear, considering all these arguments, that joining the EU would have merely negative effects on the Alpine country. In addition to losing its independency and its high esteem on an international basis, its inhabitants would soon grow unhappy as they would lose a great deal of their competences in the decision-making process. This would lead to their wishes being ignored by the government just as in many other countries. To make things worse, a considerable amount of Swiss capital would be awarded to bankrupt countries such as Greece, Italy or Spain. This money could no longer be used to meet Switzerland’s own needs and would be missing in the social system. As you can see, there are barely any advantages for Switzerland if it was to join the EU. The economy, just as the citizens, is more fortunate on its own.

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Feedback:
  1. too much information in the introduction
    We actually thought that all the information is relevant and therefore did not make many changes. 
  2. very good register
    Thank you! :)
  3. sometimes redundand (word repition,...)
    We realised that ourselves and tried to avoid repetition.
  4. 3rd paragraph -> topic sentence didn't fit
    We totally agreed and changed it.
  5. not enough arguments in the 3rd paragraph
  6. 2nd paragraph too long and detailed
    We transferred one part of the 2nd paragraph to the third one.
Topic/Concluding sentence:
We tried to focus on good topic and concluding sentences and made sure that they are well-linked. 


13/11/2013

European Commission

ORIGINAL VERSION:


The European Commission is one of the main institutions of the European Union and therefore plays a major role in its internal affairs. In addition to representing the EU as a whole, it has to meet various responsibilities such as managing the budget, setting priorities for actions and enforcing the European law. On top of that, the EC can propose new legislations to the European Parliament and the Council of the European Union and negotiate international agreements for the EU. The European Commission consists of 27 Commissioners, each representing one Member State, and its President, currently José Manuel Barroso from Portugal. The Commissioners have to focus on the EU’s needs rather than those of their home country and each of them is responsible for a specific field of policy. Additional work forces keep the Commission running smoothly. These administrators, lawyers, economists, translators, interpreters, secretarial staff and others are organized in departments. All in all, the European Commission plays without doubt a vital role in the EU as it operates in a great number of political, economic and social areas.


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REVISED VERSION:


The European Commission (EC) is one of the main institutions of the European Union and plays a major role in its internal affairs. In addition to these internal duties, it represents the EU as a whole and has to fulfill various responsibilities such as managing the budget, setting priorities for actions and enforcing European law. Moreover, the EC can propose new legislation to the European Parliament and the Council of the European Union and negotiates international agreements for the EU. The European Commission consists of 27 Commissioners, each representing one Member State, and its President. The Commissioners have to focus on the EU’s needs rather than those of their home country and each of them is responsible for a specific field of policy. Additional work forces such as administrators, lawyers, economists, translators, interpreters and secretarial staff keep the Commission running smoothly. The European Commission, which operates in a great number of political, economic and social areas, clearly plays a vital role in the EU.


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12/10/2013

EU individual paragraph: Travelling in the EU!

It is undeniable that the EU facilitates our international lives by far thanks to the open boarders. First of all, you do not need your passport with you all the time anymore. When crossing boarders nobody controls you, you can simply enter the new country without any inconvenience. A small drawback about this is, however, that you do not get those cool stamps anymore. Secondly, the import of goods became really simple and cheap as the EU repealed the laws concerning duty. Many people make use of this by going shopping in the neighbouring country if they live close to the boarder, because often it is cheaper than in their home country. On top of that, EU-citizens now have the possibility to work and live in any of the EU-countries without much difficulty. They do not need to get a visa, for example, or a working permit. To sum it up, we really do benefit from our EU-membership, especially in terms of travelling and working abroad.

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FEEDBACK:
by far -> much
with you all the time anymore -> when you are travelling anymore
the new country -> another EU-member state
get those cool stamps -> can not add the individual stamps of the countries to your passport anymore
possibility -> opportunity

It is undeniable that the EU facilitates our international lives much thanks to the open boarders. First of all, you do not need your passport when you are travelling anymore. When crossing boarders nobody controls you, you can simply enter another EU-member state without any inconvenience. A small drawback about this is, however, that you can not add the individual stamps of the countries you visited to your passport anymore. Secondly, the import of goods became really simple and cheap as the EU repealed the laws concerning duty. Many people make use of this by shopping in the neighbouring country if they live close to the boarder, because often it is cheaper than in their home country. On top of that, EU-citizens now have the opportunity to work and live in any of the EU-countries without much difficulty. They do not need to get a visa, for example, or a working permit. To sum it up, we really do benefit from our EU-membership, especially in terms of travelling and working abroad.

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FEEDBACK II:

try to avoid using "you" all the time
EU-member state/citizen/membership... -> no hyphen
passport synonym -> could not really find one
try to use more high-register words

FINAL PARAGRAPH:

It is undeniable that the European Union facilitates the international lives of the EU citizens much thanks to the open boarders. First of all, the formerly indespensable passports are no longer required for travelling in most European countries. The entry into another EU member state usually proceeds without the inconvenience of having your passport or luggage controlled. A small drawback about this is, however, that you can not enclose the individual stamps of the countries you visited to your passport anymore. Secondly, the import of goods, which may be cheaper in a neighbouring country, became really simple and inexpensive as the EU repealed the individual laws concerning duty. Many people make use of this by shopping abroad if they live close to the boarder. On top of that, EU citizens now have the opportunity to work and live in any of the EU countries without much difficulty. A visa, for example, or a working permit is not necessary any more. To sum it up, the inhibitants of the European countries really profit from the European Union, especially in terms of travelling and working abroad.

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FINAL, FINAL VERSION:

It is undeniable that the European Union facilitates our international lives much thanks to the open borders. First of all, passports used to be indispensable, but nowadays they are no longer required for travelling throughout the European continent. The inconvenience of having your passport or luggage inspected is no longer existent when travelling in the EU. A minor drawback of this is, however, that  you can no longer add the individual stamps of the countries you visited to your passport anymore. Secondly, goods which might be cheaper in a neighbouring country can be imported easily nowadays as the national laws concerning duty became invalid when the countries joined the EU. Many people take advantage of this by buying products in other member states if they live close to the border. On top of that, EU citizens now have the opportunity to work and live in any of the EU countries without much difficulty. A visa, for example, or a work permit is not necessary anymore. To sum up, the inhabitants of the European countries undoubtedly profit from the European Union, especially in terms of travelling and working. 

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